Discussion of "October Chill: A Halloween to Remember (4)" by dogdeity11

OMG!!! What a ride! What devious plotting! What a gut wrencher! Man, you got it all in here. Fabulous!

Thanks WWB. I'm not happy with the format this ended up in, what with the large spaces in between the sentences, but it was best I could get. Not sure whats happened to SM but I can no longer copy and paste into it with any success. it always wants to change my format. ugh.
anyhow, glad you liked it man. This one took a decidedly morbid decent. It will be interesting to see how the next MASHer handles a tour of Hell. ha!

This is incredible! I only wish I could capture the reader's attention the way you do. I need to start forcing myself to involve more fantasy in my work...I'm sort of stuck in the "draw from your own experience mode". Ha.

Oh, and you aren't joking about the formatting when you copy and paste. I recently saw what SM did to something I submitted, it messed up all the spacing like in yours, but only in one paragraph, so that one stands out now. Bizzare. Annoying, haha.

Keep it up, I love your stuff :)

That was amazing. At first, I didn't like that you had turned it into a supernatural thing, for I had originally intended to keep it realistic(Sick psychotic kidnaps kid and torments dude for unknown reason) when I begun it, but you took this to an awesome level. Really incredible ride man.

Thanks Cheese! I'm glad you wound up digging it. I totally understand what your saying too. I had no intention at first of going where I did. the reason it took me so long to get this one posted is because I had a real hard time trying to justify why an 'Evil', as you say...'Sick, psychotic' preacher would be motivated to try and better the life of this alcoholic, joe-blow nobody whose on leave from his job at the steel mill? Why would an Evil preacher offer someone a second chance to be a better citizen? I was struggling with my creative juices so I got ****-faced on captain and coke and woke-up with these demons in my head demanding release. maybe after this project is over we can go back and work out a more realistic storyline to this one? let me know if you have ideas...

I voted 5 earlier, but I didn't want to comment until I had time to read up on the Grigori and get a full picture of the madness you created. Amazing! The Watchers of men, fallen because of lust. So cool! And I love that you made Penemue (the writer, from what I understand) one of the more vocal demons. Simply amazing as always.

Dog --
For the record, you're ridiculously difficult to follow. Eesh.
Ummmmm... way to write what you know...? (I published the next chapter and now I feel dirty.) You convincingly portray John while bending genres and maintaining the integrity of the storyline. (Is there some kind of bleach I can ingest to cleanse myself?) Never heard of Grigori before this, but you paint them into existence with vibrant red and black. (Hope I can sleep tonight.) Here, take my socks. I stepped in something and now they're stained. I don't think I can wear them anymore.
-- Nash

Not bad at all.

Wow, Dog! Bow wow! You wow, I bow! Definately a mindbending journey. The cola certainly didn't drown the Captain the night you wrote this. :-) I haven't read Nash's yet, so am hoping it will leave me at a place I can fathom. That bedroom was getting a little too crowded.

Emanate and prepossessing!