Terrific chapter. Interesting and thought provoking. I enjoyed the comments as well.

you could serve me better by not wasting my time with your comments. kind of like I dont waste my time with yours anymore

Congras foo. I loved your contribution!

Thanks theblackhand. I am a long time Prince fan and love the 'Under the Cherry Moon' album. That is exactly where that particular phrase came from too. :-)

I appreciate you taking the time to read quetzacoatl. In fact, writing a 'fantasy' type story was sort of 'out of the box' for me. However I believe I know what your saying. Perhaps something a little less marketable and a little more intellectual. Good comment, thanks!

I love how disgusted this made me. I hate Leroy and yet I can’t wait to find out what he does next.
I found it interesting the story is ‘Leroy’s head’ and not ‘Leroy’s heart.’ ?
As always honeygloom, the writing is terrific. Gripping and emotional.
I can’t wait for more demented chapters.

This was so entertaining. I admit I had this image of Zapp Brannigan from Futurama as Bolt. Something about Sci-fi yarns always lead me to cartoon visuals.
Anyhow, really fun read and well written. I hope to see you continue this one.

This is really cool. I don’t think I completely understand what is happening...and I'm not sure if I am supposed to or not? Either way, I really enjoyed it. Nice bit of writing.

crystalfoo~ Finally found the time to read and absorb this and I’ve got a few things to say:
I agree with some of the others that this chapter seems a bit overloaded. I also agree that the shifting scenes were mildly distracting. (Not very much…just mildly)
However the negatives were far outweighed by the positives. For beginners, this was terrifically written. I loved your word usage and your creativity in adding some definition to this storyline. I agree completely that the storyline, while really good…was running slow. This chapter certainly brought it up to speed. I like the Paige kidnapping. I love the inclusion of past characters. The suspense, the thrills, the twist, the leave. Excellent.
I haven’t read the rest of the entries for this round yet, however this is definitely one of the more entertaining chapters I’ve read in this entire series…which doesn’t necessarily always translate to ‘best fit.’ Although, in this case it very well could.

crystalfoo is back in da house ya'all.
I haven't read this yet foo, I will do so very soon. I just wanted to give you a quick 'welcome back!'
we've missed you. :-)