Discussion of "The Secrets of Evelyn Dupree" by crystalfoo
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storm_fighter 9 months, 3 weeks ago
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I like the way this is starting. Evelyn comes across so very real. Don't be afraid to let her define the other characters. If it were me, I would lose the first line. It seems unsure. |
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crystalfoo 9 months, 3 weeks ago
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The first line drove me nuts. I couldn't 'find' it...lol. Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. :) |
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