Discussion of "Sunny Side Up" by crystalfoo

Wow…Foo, this is magnificent. I was so into this. You followed a really great chapter from Nash and managed to maintain the same high level of drama and excitement.
The ending was so cool!
I dropped the next chapter in, from a different direction. Can’t wait to see what someone does with the next installment. Eggs POV? Fraus? Tobys? Wrights?
We are developing some cool characters here.

This is soooo great, Foo. Another awesome installment. I have to admit that I am "green with envy" at the way you, dog and nash are writing this tale...lol. I'm having a ball reading how each of you take this on and add your individual twists and turns, while keeping it all reading as if one person had written it. Absolutely superior writing!!!

Did I forget the obvious? FIVE points!!

Honey, my apologies for omitting your name in all that praise (above). Certainly you're right in there amongst it all!!

Thanks to both of you! yea, this mash is a blast. It's really coming together! WWB-don't forget Honey!
so, yea Dog, I agree. The characters are really coming into their own. I'm thinking someone has got to write a lil' something from Shirley's POV. (ummm...Honey?) She's the mastermind remember? And there's that little bit that eluded to Wright's daughter, which makes her Shirley's neice, which makes her another 'she' not to mess with...hmmm. who knows?!
Thanks again for the votes. I'm off to read dog's new chapter.
exciting stuff...:)

Amazing! This is getting stickier by the second. You kept up Nash's adrenaline infused chapter with smashing success!

Apparently we're all online simultaneously. Hmm.

I like el twisto - I wrote Toby's POV of the accident to avoid the incredible coincidence of how two complete strangers "just happened" to run into each other. Coincidences aren't easy to pull off this far from the beginning of a story; they turn out hokey. You not only explained (and justified) the accident happening, you used it to realistically put the characters together. Hadn't thought of that. Niiiiiice.

Related coincidence: my bare feet. 5.

yea, cool, we should have a little sm chat room...
thanks for the vote, nash. I love it when your sockless. thanks for the perfect setup, (the buick in the wreck, the headless corpse on the gurney...) my chapter might of been a bit...farfetched...you know, dragging a body to another car etc..but I couldn't see another way to bring the obvious together without having egg and frau caught up in a bunch of **** because of a dead body in the trunk. and I didn't want to write a shoot-out scene...yet. lol.
thanks honey, and your right, it's getting pretty hairy...:)