reading this felt like eating a heaping bowl of air. There was a lot there, but not much of substance. The description was good, but you didn't give me anything to really sink my teeth into. You need to give some hint about what the story is about, or what the dreams were that started it, or be inside SOMEones head to give direct reactions, instead of an overall non-description. It is a lot of tell, and no show. I would really like to see this re-edited, and some meat put on the bones of this story. Please don't throw this baby out with the bath water!!!

after judging week, then the author name could be put on their chap., forgot that part of the idea. Maybe only the judges could know ident, but don't know how that would work, then maybe not, would help with "fair" judging!! lol

I think things could be a little more unbiased if when the chapters are being considered that only a number system be used instead of identities. The numbers could be in order of publishing. That way the only way you'd know the author is by style, or if they tell you that they wrote which chap. I know it isn't perfect, and wouldn't help the ones that submit on the last day, but it would help stop the "getting back" thing that seems to be a big concern. Hope this can be a useful idea.

This had the beginnings of a really good story. I think it was a bit hurried after the party scene, and would be better if it could be fleshed out more.

I liked her coming back to life, but the wishes thing was just to Pat, and done. I think if you took more time, and added your usual panache it would be much better!!

It is difficult when both lines of a story are this good. I liked the visuals, and enjoyed the dialog accent, but when it was just description I would have liked regular verbage.

I loved the dialog! The accent was soooo perfect!

VERY NICE!! I really like the way this is going, you all seem to be one writer. The voice is staying.

This has gone in a direction that is really fun and intriguing. Where did you get the idea fairies are made of water?? Interesting!

I didn't think of a period, something that would soak a shirt and still smell so strongly of blood would be more than a period would make. I am curious if it is human or animal....