Discussion of "Dust and Whiskey: A Light in the Sky" by cerebralsparks

I do...as I lean forward to get the rest of the story....

I feel like this could be the start of a good story, but you didn't give me enough info. The first chapter should always introduce the setting and situation that characters are in. Other than that the story telling was handled pretty well. You're descriptive and seem to be in the right frame of mind to handle the roal of our southern narrator. Take another stab and add more detail and you'll have something great. For right now, it's a three.

I agree with pss, excellent start but not enough content.

4 stars

Ha ha. Shortening my tag to pss makes it sound like piss when you read it. Oh, potty humor is great.