Discussion of "Diary of a Madwoman" by botherdonk

girl i feel u. i thought this prose was an excellent veiw inside the dark parts of the mind. dark parts that we all have. Good job sweetie. keep it up.

I can not begin to explain how much I appreciate your comment. thank-you.
:-)

While I appreciate the subject matter, and the heart behind the words, I felt it that this wasn't constructed so much as scribbled out. I don't mean disrespect by that at all, as I've been known to scribble poetry and prose without hesitation or thought, myself. Just a few simple critiques: Check your grammar. Sometimes the turning point for a reader is not in the subject, but in the way in which it's proposed. Secondly, think about structuring your prose or poetry.

thank you very much, I added that first diary entry before really appreciateing and understanding the website.
I posted a second short story, maybe you can check that one out and give me some pointers.
Thanks!