Nice twist here!

I like the further insight into Dennis through his appearance. Good installment overall.

Nice work creating the character. His behavior sets up any number of possibilities for future writing. Well written as well. 4 Stars.

Thank you for the input. The doctors/delusional murderer thing was a slight problem for me, but I couldn't smoothly write it out. I might publish a rewrite if I can smoothen these things out.

I like what I see here. I'm going to mash this now in a crazy direction. Tell me what you think when I'm finished, please.

Thank you.

Fine work here. I think I might try mashing this.

Not bad at all.

Thanks!

Written rather well, this concept is great. However, I would have liked a little more exploration into Mary, Amos, and the other Amish.