Discussion of "Rainy Days and Mondays: Chapter 2" by Wandering_Rian

Dang, you know, as soon as I posted it, I knew that that last line should have been a question. It should be....

Piffle?

Aw naw yo di-unt! Nice continuation; no apology necessary. Well done! I was curious how he ignored the intruder for so long, but alcoholism justifies many a hallucination. You captured his tone and attitude, and I believe it. Since it's no longer restricted to five chapters, the limited movement works. (I might've liked it pushed a bit further for the contest, but that's neither here nor there.) And I agree, the final Piffle works better with a question mark. Still, I enjoyed it - maybe I'll tagteam it next week if no one else jumps in. (4)

Aw nuts! You stole my chapter;) Glad you did though, because this is NOT what I had in mind. No, this is much better. Nice work, you kept the voice up really well and I LOVE the twist. Really no need to apologize, you write very well out of your comfort zone:)

It was just too good to resist.

I think Nash gets a lot of credit for my ability to keep the voice up. He set up such a realistic character, all I had to do was listen. :)

The comments coming from both of you mean a lot.

Thanks.

Wandering_Rian you are certainly one to watch. I loved your second Chapter for "The Unknown" and loved this too. You mention that you are a huge Kafka fan (as am I) so I am excited to see what happens as you continue writing. Bring on the absurd!