It's a good piece that has really upped the ante. I think I'll start to work on chapter 4:)

Thanks, for the comments everyone. I actually thought that making Ms. B an informant rather than an agent was very natural conclusion after she was checking the tombstones in the cemetary and commented about changing her identity to run away from the FBI.

Don't do it! We've gone two chapters and have stayed in first person. Don't try to introduce the third...please...I beg of you...:)

I like the storyline and the direction this pice went, but a few problems really bugged me:
1) Writing "had had" grammatically it is correct, but I always find reading double words inhibit the flow. It is much better to say a single "had" if you can get away with it, or something like "had worn."
2) "Amy and his mother" stopped me, and I started wondering if I missed something and Amy was a boy.
3) If Jake had to be punished, why was holding hands with Amy at the end of Chapter 2?
I found these items really taking away from an otherwise good story.

Yeah, I rewrote the first part about three times I never got the full suspense/sensation that I wanted. If anyone has any suggestions how I could improve it, I'm all ears.

Could you explain and eloborate what you mean by two different stories?

It started slow and somewhat unbelieveable, but it really picked up towards the end. One of the best yet. 4 stars.

Fun Question: How old is Ms. B?

I'm a little confused; what was in the interior of the bus? It is an interesting twist that the mayor was actually trying to help her, but how did Pete have her phone number? Was he a double agent?

Good Chapter. I liked how the dialogue play in the conversation on the phone. Good Luck!