Thanks! I did mean to come back and continue this, but somehow it didnt happen. Would love it if you'd take a shot at mashing this.

Liked it! The plot and the characters are very nicely built up.

Nice twist there. A little slow in pace but good nevertheless. Also, I found the constant change in tenses a little too distracting.

Interesting premise. Apart from the few typos, I liked it. Starts of as a sweet story..but your title seems to hint at something else. I have to read the next chapter now! :)

Hmm..a mystery with a treasure at the end? Wow! Like your style. But one thing is bothering me. If Matilda is the one into occult and books and stuff and someone who seems to like adventure, I would expect her to be at least a little intrigued by the ancient key.

Very nicely done! Snippets of life that say so much about his life. loved it!

Loved this! the tension is gripping. The drive, the panic, the search, the murder, everything was very well done. But, I do feel that Paige has been abducted a little too soon and its connection to the murders is not very clear to me right now. Why will the killer abduct her and not kill her? Why will he get her to call Adara? But, then maybe you have something figured out..maybe the killer knows about Adara's powers and wants to prevent her from coming after him?

Loved this chapter. You've written it very well. Though I did feel the story didnt move forward too much..we have a suspect! And that too a very interesting suspect with a connection to the first murder. Loved that little twist in the end.

Thanks! I like your writing. So, compliments from you are a bonus! :)
P.S. You have an interesting username!

Thanks Silver. I'd love to mash Jake.. but not sure I'll be able to do justice to it. Simply because I find myself a little lacking when it comes to describing scenes, especially murders, explicitly. But I'll definitely like to give it a shot when I get the time.