Discussion of "The Bank Robbers" by TornConcious

I am starting this series on three friends who begin to rob banks within New York City. If you would like to make a story of these men robbing a bank, feel free. I will also be adding background story next about how this started.

The last line deserves a re-write. It doesn't connect to the rest of the chapter and feels cheated. However, the remainder of the work is well written: good descriptions and nice set up of a plot.

Interesting and intriguing start. Very short and simple, but works. Hooks the reader in.