All Comments by TornConcious

Hi, I am promoting myself I guess. I am looking for some more reviews on my writing and some tips, preferably on the storyline I really am working hard on, Elfin (Still trying to think of a better title!). It would be fantastic if I could get some help and input.

I am working on writing a book and would like some input on my story so far. The elfin series!

Hey all, I just wanted to say that I am working on a novel at the moment and am publishing chapters! It is the Twelve Lords stories!

I plan to delve a bit deeper into the inner machinations of Shiandrin and Ikbar's rise and fall from power. I think this rewrite is necessary.

I have added the next chapter, I hope you enjoy!

Continuation on the prologue, please tell me what you think!

An interesting idea, but not the direction that I am taking it chloe. I am great excited by the fact you find my writing so interesting as to continue it.

Half and half, I have decided on the ending, but the way there could go anywhere!

The last part was referring to Syruscleat

Thank you for your input Chloe, please don't be post unless you are asking questions related to this piece of work or comments on it.

This is an excellent concept I believe, hopefully I can bring it to life!

Paste some of your writing there and it actually does give you bad advice...

Someone thinks highly of themselves :9 Yes, it is a little face smiling with it's tongue sticking out!

I joined a little while ago but never posted on the forum, so hi. I have published four chapters now and I hope you like them!

Thelestro, there is a reason I gave this a 1.0. This story is trashy and vile. I would like to offer a suggestion though, limit the swearing and work on clarifying your ideas, I barely understood the entire idea of the story...

The continuation finally, enjoy, two or three more chapters until the thrilling conclusion...

jlawson, this is simply a prologue to establish an extremely important part in Hayden's past, there will be quite a deep story later on. Thank you for the input though!

Thank you

Check your spelling, many of your Is are not capitalized, otherwise, interesting...

Nice continuation. I think a lot of people wish to see the next chapter.

I am sorry, I just noticed you have continued it!

Excellent, a story I am truly interested in reading about, I hope you continue it soon.

I am starting this series on three friends who begin to rob banks within New York City. If you would like to make a story of these men robbing a bank, feel free. I will also be adding background story next about how this started.

Excellent beginning, laying out the story for someone else or yourself to write the fight, if you would like, I will do this.

Short and sweet, just an opening for a long story I am writing.

Thank you for your input :)

Thank you

My first chapter, hope you enjoy.