Discussion of "Fictional Midnight" by Sweet_Beats

Greetings, SB. Welcome to SM!
Fictional Midnight is a good title, and the idea of beginning the story this far into Betsey's life and career is good as well- it allows for revealing flashbacks in later chapters (if that's the way you're going to go,).

However, this chapter is a bit short. Also, its density of optimism makes me, as a reader, wonder when the other shoe will fall. Now, I'm not necessarily a fan of tragedy and heartache, but a little bit makes for better writing (and reading,) than none at all. To elaborate: If her career takes off here and only gets better throughout the entire story, then you've wrapped the entire thing up in one brief chapter. However, if this were approached a la Camus, making this episode the absolute high point in Betsey's life and career and then proceeding from bad to worse to oblivion (and perhaps even beyond that!), then your readers will keep tuning in, infested with a fear that her newest adventure will be her last, or else even worse than they might imagine for her.

Call me dark, I guess.
Please do continue this- I'm fascinated with music industry stories, and I'm sure I'm not alone. I didn't vote on this chapter, but I shall vote on future ones, should you continue.

Welcome again!

Thanks so much for your response and I take your ideas to heart.

This is not the beginning or the end for our "anti hero" as I like to call her, nor is this the high point in her career. I'm worried that all the music generalities are a little cliche though, and I'm working through more plot twists in my head that aren't going to be predictable. Think Joan Jett and Nikki Sixx for some broad ideas. Do you have any ideas to add? Of course, my character Doug is going to dissapear for awhile he shall return, bringing down our Betsey. Chapter 2 will be started tomorrow, and it will be longer. This was meant to be more an i intro than a chapter.

Nice start, I like how you jump right in. And I'm interested to see what befalls Betsey:)