Discussion of "Graduated Vampire Slayer" by Jackoalltrades

I would like for you to add a chpt to a story I have created...click on my name and read "I am requesting 28 authors..." for more details.
Hope you will contribute.

Nice continuation! Watch your tense when you are relating events that already happened in the past. Like the following: “I'd been reading up on everything about vampires for the last six months, discovering ways to kill them.” is only correct if you take out the word ‘last’, otherwise it’s a little confusing. Otherwise, I love this guy, he falls ****-backwards into the one thing that kills vampires and is just totally nonchalant about the whole thing. Awesome!

Would you be willing to mash it? I need some help continuing this. I have some ideas, but the ones I have right now don't really mesh well with the story as it stands now. I ask because you're an excellent writer (does flattery help my case? ;) and because you're the only one to really have read this story :P

Thanks honeygloom. I didn't think people were really reading this. I was just kinda going on out of my own curiosity. Thanks for the grammar point.