This was very amusing. I enjoyed it greatly. I liked the play style it was written in, and the story was interesting, to say the least. Why rob Tom Brady, besides the fact that he's absurdly well off? Your characters were superb, and their interaction was colorful and playful and just a lot of fun to read.

An interesting collection of thoughts...knowing human nature we will most likely be the conquerors, or at least the attempted conquerors.

I don't actually think I'll switch off our beloved heroes quite yet. I have some fun ideas for the group that I'll run with before introducing the baddies.

Chapter 10 of my Trader Chron is up for your approval o Master of Critique. Hope you enjoy.

Interesting. I really like it. Can't really think of anything to critique. The details are excellent, the story is new, the pace is even. This is a pretty solid piece of work. Well done. I hope you continue this. I enjoy being creeped out :)

By the way guys, you've made my week with your positive feedback. Seriously. I fell asleep last night with a grin on my face because someone enjoyed this story as much as I did :)

Hmmm that's not a bad idea, looking back at it. I'll make sure to keep that in mind.

After rereading it, I did use "had" way too many times. Thanks for the input Dog.

No worries Dog. This is one I care about. I don't plan on rushing a bunch of chapters. This one I plan to keep clean and pristine.

Okay guys, you've convinced me. Since you two seem to be the first to read all the way through and comment, I'll try my absolute damndest to put out some more exciting chapters. Hopefully they'll live up to your expectations. Give me a few days, and we'll see what happens.